Chữa đề IELTS Writing task 2 Older people continue to work

Đề bài IELTS Writing task 2

It is a good idea for people to continue working in an old age, if it is possible for them to do so. Do you agree or disagree?

Ý tưởng viết

Với đề bài này, SOL thiên về ý kiến đồng ý  (I tend to agree). Và SOL sẽ triển khai một số luận điểm như sau:

• Lợi ích của người lớn tuổi khi làm việc 
  • Có nhiều lợi ích cho tinh thần (mental health) như keep active, avoid loneliness and depression, maintain contact with society, enhance social participation
  • Làm cho họ độc lập hơn về mặt kinh tế (more economically independent): maintain economic independence, not rely on family or social welfare
  • Góp phần kế thừa kinh nghiệm )contribute to the inheritance of experience: pass these experiences and knowledge to the younger generation
• Tuy nhiên cũng sẽ phát sinh một số vấn đề
  • Vấn đề sức khỏe của người cao tuổi (health issues of the elderly): with the increase of age, physical health may decline
  • Người lớn tuổi nên hưởng thụ cuộc sống hưu trí (retirement life) instead of continuing to work
  • Giảm cơ hội việc làm cho người trẻ tuổi (reduce job opportunities for young people), nếu họ tiếp tục làm việc may take up job opportunities for young people)。

Conclusion: I support the elderly to continue working in the case of physical health; help to pass on experience, keep a shorter and reasonable time; enough time to enjoy retirement life.

Sample band 8.0

As people live longer and healthier lives, the idea of continuing to work in old age has become a topic of discussion. I tend to agree that it is a good idea for older individuals to keep working if they are capable of doing so. However, there are both advantages and potential downsides to this issue that must be considered.

One of the major benefits of continuing to work in old age is the positive impact on mental health. Work can help elderly individuals keep active and avoid loneliness and depression. By maintaining a job, they can maintain contact with society, stay engaged, and enhance social participation, all of which contribute to overall well-being. Another significant advantage is that working allows the elderly to become more economically independent. Continuing to work enables them to maintain economic independence and avoid becoming financially dependent on their families or relying on social welfare. In many cases, the extra income can improve their quality of life in retirement, allowing them to pursue hobbies or enjoy other activities they might not have been able to afford otherwise.

In addition, older individuals can contribute to the inheritanceof experience. Their vast work experience and knowledge accumulated over the years can be passed on to younger generations. By staying in the workforce, they provide valuable guidance, helping younger employees learn from their expertiseand avoid common mistakes.

However, working in old age also has certain drawbacks. As with the increase of age, the elderly often face declining physical health. Long working hours and job stress may take a toll on their physical health, potentially exacerbatingany existing health problems. Moreover, some argue that elderly individuals should enjoy their retirement life. They deserve time to do what they love without the pressures of a job. Continuing to work could deprivethem of the opportunity to relax and enjoy their golden years. Another issue is that older workers may reduce job opportunities for young people. In some cases, if elderly individuals continue to work, they might take up job opportunities for young people, particularly in industries where positions are limited. This could negatively affect youth employment rates.

In conclusion, while I support the elderly in continuing to work in the case of physical health, it is important to maintain a balance. It is crucial to keep a shorter and reasonable time for work, ensuring they have enough time to enjoy retirement life and providing ample opportunities for younger workers to enter the workforce.

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Từ vựng IELTS hữu ích

Dưới đây là một số cụm từ hữu ích trong bài viết trên:

• Live longer and healthier lives: sống lâu hơn và khỏe mạnh hơn
• Continuing to work: tiếp tục làm việc
• Positive impact on mental health: tác động tích cực đến sức khỏe tinh thần
• Avoid loneliness and depression: tránh cô đơn và trầm cảm
• Maintain contact with society: duy trì liên lạc với xã hội
• Enhance social participation: tăng cường tham gia xã hội
• Economically independent: độc lập về kinh tế
• Financially dependent on their families: phụ thuộc tài chính vào gia đình
• Improve their quality of life: cải thiện chất lượng cuộc sống của họ
• Contribute to the inheritance of experience: đóng góp vào việc truyền lại kinh nghiệm
• Accumulated over the years: tích lũy qua nhiều năm
• Provide valuable guidance: cung cấp hướng dẫn quý giá
• Declining physical health: sức khỏe thể chất suy giảm
• Job stress may take a toll on their physical health: căng thẳng công việc có thể ảnh hưởng xấu đến sức khỏe thể chất của họ
• Enjoy their retirement life: tận hưởng cuộc sống nghỉ hưu
• Deprive them of the opportunity: tước đi cơ hội của họ
• Reduce job opportunities for young people: giảm cơ hội việc làm cho người trẻ